What are your career aspirations upon graduation of the degree-programme? Please describe, how are you going to secure these your career-goals? How do you see your career to progress over the next five years?

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I have still a great thirst for higher education. My aim is to do a Master's in entrepreneurship. I want to achieve

the highest

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higher

the higher

education in some

business

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& Management subject to make myself competent enough to build a good and lucrative future of my dreams. Upon graduation from

business

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school, I was offered a job in the pharmaceutical sector at middle-level management.

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is where I learned how to apply the principles and lessons of management to real life. It was fascinating and transformed my interest in entrepreneurship research into a passion. I read extensively, trying to keep myself informed about entrepreneurs thinking in my areas of work. By going

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great depth and findings, I realized that I should go abroad for higher studies because the methods and facilities available here are

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to help me in competing for the challenges of the growing world. My

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and foremost goal is to achieve

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degree so that I will be able to capture the entrepreneurial opportunities in my country by establishing my own

business

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of international standards. After that, I

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plan to expand that

business

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at the national and international levels. In the future, I want to become an employer and to provide jobs. I think in

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way I can help my country to reduce the unemployment rate that helps my country people to lead a good and meaningful life.

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, It will give tangible and intangible rewards like independence, flexibility, power, and monetary reward.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

249 words

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What are your career aspirations upon graduation of the degree-programme? Please describe, how are you going to secure these your career-goals? How do you see your career to progress over the next five years?

Include an introduction and conclusion

It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and disadvanatges to this?

Some people believe that it is good for students to have the same teacher for several years. Others think students benefit more from having new teachers each year. Which do you think is better? Give specific reasons to support your opinion.

Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?