Some students work while studying this often results in lacking time for education and constantly feeling under pressure. What do you think are the cause of this? What solution can you suggest?

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Nowadays, many students
work
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while studying.
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this
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tendency may lead to negative results. The numbers of young people who sacrifice
education
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for
work
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is growing. I believe that
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problem
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has certain causes and can solve by taking special measures. To start with, it is apparent that most of the students who
work
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have many financial expenses to meet. One common cause of high cost of
education
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.
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universities and colleges high
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universities, colleges and high
universities colleges and high
tuition fees, some family cannot afford higher
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for their children. The other causes is living expenses. Many students stay away from hometown, and have to pay for accommodation, food, entertainment.
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, I can suggest two possible
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problem
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the government could make higher
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free.
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,
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result can be achieved by financing
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from the country's budget.
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, promoting unpaid e-learning
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from
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doesn't require a lot of resources to be maintained. It
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makes
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an easier life
for those students, who face a
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in own life for study. To conclude, I believe that mainly lack of financial resources causes students to
work
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, but
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problem
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solved by lowering the amount of financial expenses has students have to meet.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial necessity
  • Tuition
  • Living costs
  • Employability
  • Work experience
  • Under pressure
  • Mismanagement
  • Time-management
  • Academic pursuits
  • Flexible part-time study
  • Financial aid
  • Scholarships
  • Bursaries
  • Collaboration
  • Integrated programs
  • Education
  • Work-life balance
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