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In some cities and towns all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of these and what actions can be taken to solve this problem?

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Heavy
traffic
 congestion is causing troubles in different cities and sub-urban areas all around the world. Growing population and becoming solvent financially are the main reasons for
such
 enormous amount of
traffic
 on the road which can be controlled by decentralizing the cities as well as implementing appropriate
traffic
 rules. As most of the people are moving to cities and towns to lead a modern life with all sorts of amenities, high
traffic
volume
 is increasing immensely since most of them are looking for a better living. Despite of having limited areas to live, many people are moving
in
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to
 the cities from rural areas which are causing excessive pressure on the road.
However
, because of the financial development of the city-dwellers, many of them are able to buy their own vehicles
instead
 of using public transports. Since the number of private transport is increasing greatly, roads are becoming more congested to hold on to the large amount of vehicles. According to the latest report from
BBC
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the BBC
, almost 50 new vehicles are entering
on
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in
 the street of Dhaka, which is the main reason for the unthinkable
traffic
 congestion of the city. According to that report, growing financial flow and excessive population are the main reasons for
such
 amount of
traffic
. Decentralizing the cities and implementing
traffic
 laws will reduce the
traffic
volume
efficiently
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efficiency
. Since most of the modern facilities are available in urban life, decentralization will make sure of availability of those facilities in rural areas as well, which will
demotivate
 rural people to migrate to the city areas.
In addition
, strict monitoring
on
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of
traffic system
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the traffic system
 will
also
 ensure free flow of the
traffic
 which is essential to reduce the
traffic
volume
. Dhaka Metropolitan Police
have imposed
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has imposed
 high penalty for breaking
traffic
 laws in Gulshan and Banani recently, and the
traffic
 condition of these areas
have improved
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has improved
 dramatically. To conclude, it is quite certain that
high
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the high traffic volume
traffic
volume
 is causing due to the increased population and improved overall economy, while maintaining
traffic
 regulation properly as well decentralizing the cities will help to improve the whole scenario.

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