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In education and employment, some people work harder than others. Why do some people work harder? is it always a good thing to work hard?

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Hardworking in right path is always considered as a key to success. Many people believe to
work
 hard during study and job than others,
however
, it can
also
 be argued how often hard working can be beneficial.
This
 essay shall discuss both views separately.
Life
 is a competition, everyone just trying to
work
 harder so they can achieve
life
 goals. People who
work
 hard, have progressive motives that force them to
work
 more than others in their respective field. These people tend to get a good position in society through their hard
work
.
For instance
, my one friend during university times, use to concentrate at studies more than other classmates.
This
 exhaustive study habit led him to get a gold medal in university. It is a fact that hard working is always considered as best. In
this
 competing world, if we wish to get a higher position.
Hence
, we must
work
 hard.
Therefore
, people who spend more time on studies and
work
 hard at their jobs, likely to get more success in all platforms of
life
 as compared to other normal working individuals.
For example
, one of my friends’ company had implemented KPI's (key performance Indicators) for all jobs.
As a result
, now he is being monitored by these KPI's.
In addition
, due to his hardworking nature, he had attained two job promotion in a year's time. To conclude, the day we start our
life
, the most common phrase we hear is working hard either you are studying or working.
Therefore
, it’s mandatory for us if we want to win the race of
this
 highly challenging
life
, we should
work
 harder to attain our desired goals in
life
.

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