All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them. Do you agree or disagree?

All transportation methods that use fossil
fuel
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ought to be prohibited,
thus
electric ones should be introduced
instead
.   I absolutely agree with
this
statement as electric
cars
are environmentally friendly
as well as
it can provide a wider range of better amenities.   Vehicles that use
electricity
are obviously better for the environment
specially
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nowadays.   On
one
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hand
population
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the population
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alongside industry are growing fast and in many different aspects,
cars
being  one of the widely
increased
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used
item
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nowadays.
on the other
hand
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we
faced
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a huge issue with all the harmful emissions which will
obtain
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a negative effect.  
Moreover
, as our planet is facing the dangers of global warming, and how
cars’
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fuel
had previously been proven to have a serious role in
this
disaster, it is about time to find
the
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a
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solution and replace
fuel
with
electricity
.   Sweden is one the pioneer countries in attempting to replace the ancient
fuel dependant
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fuel-dependent
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vehicles with modern electrical ones.
Variety
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of qualities
the
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electric
cars
can provide to introduce a better experience for
the
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people.   When it
will be
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absolutely
dependant
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on
electricity
,
this
lift
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lifts
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weights from the
user
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shoulders,
while
previously he or she
were
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obliged to fill up the gas tank every once
a
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while
.  
Safety wise
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,
fuel
would bring many drawbacks with it, whether in the gas station or
incase
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in case
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on
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any
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unfortunate accident, at the same time,
electricity
can
introduce
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a positive role regarding
this
aspect.  
A recent
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research
had
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been done to compare
between
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the two
cars
in the field of providing better qualities,
this
research
had
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shown marvellous results for
the
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electric vehicles.   Electrical transportation should for sure be the next step and
thus
replacing the
fuel dependant
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fuel-dependent
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ones.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • air pollution
  • greenhouse gases
  • climate change
  • sustainable
  • renewable
  • electric vehicles
  • battery technology
  • charging infrastructure
  • range anxiety
  • government support
  • incentives
  • subsidies
  • renewable energy
  • environmental impact
  • energy efficiency
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