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The world is experiencing a dramatic increase in population, this is causing problems not only for poor, underdeveloped countries, but also for industrialized and developing nations. Describe some of the problems that overpopulation causes, and suggest at least one possible solution.

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Population across the globe is increasing year by year.
This
 essay will highlight some of the major problems that are being caused by overpopulation and will
also
 give suggestions on what actions could be taken by the government to
control
 p
opulation.
Suggestion
the population
 Some serious problems
such
 as unemployment, poverty, lack of basic facilities and basic education which already exhibit in the present time are getting
further
 accelerated due to increase in population. The aforementioned problems are a root cause of many other problems
such
 as begging, theft, robbery etc., as a person who does not have a job to feed with his family, would
then
 have no other option but to beg or steal from others. Apart from the above mentioned problem, e
conomy
Suggestion
the economy
of a country
also
 gets an adverse hit with i
ncrease
Suggestion
an increase
in population. Because of demand- supply imbalance, inflation rises and everything becomes difficult to afford for those with limited income. To
control
 a
cceleration
Suggestion
the acceleration
of the above mentioned problems, the government should take steps
such
 as spreading awareness in people about the family
control
 procedures as in many underdeveloped societies, people have no or very limited knowledge about methods used for family planning. Government should
also
 run family planning schemes under which women should be given free treatment for family
control
 procedures.
Also
, the price of family
control
 products should
also
 be very less to ensure its affordability. Another possible solution could be is that the countries which are underdeveloped should offer flexible immigration opportunities in order to create a balanced world. To sum up, overpopulation is a serious issue which requires immediate attention across the globe. If the issue continued to increase with time, the world will
f
urther get into
Suggestion
get further into
recession.
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