Thw bar charts show the marriage and divorce statistics of nine countries from 1981-1994

Thw bar charts show the marriage and divorce statistics of nine countries from 1981-1994
There are two bar charts, one depicting marriage and the other illustrating
divorce
per
thousand
people
in eight different
countries
over a period of 13 years. From the marriage bar
chart
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it can be seen that in all the
countries
the marriage rates had come down, except in Denmark, where it increased.
Across
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the years the USA had seen
maximum
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the maximum
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number
pf
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of
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people
getting married among the given
countries
; a little more than 10
people
in every
thousand
used to get married in 1981. Even though the number reduced in 1994, still
US
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was leading with 9
people
getting married per
thousand
. Denmark was
next
in the queue for the same year with six
people
marrying out of a
thousand
.
Divorce
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The divorce
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chart shows that in five out of eight
countries
divorce
rates increased from 1981. Germany had a stable number of
divorce
cases,
that is
, two per
thousand
,
whereas
, Denmark and the USA saw a decreasing trend. Though Italy’s
divorce
rates are very minimal, with less than 0.1%
across
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the years,
but
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it has increased more than double.
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