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The bar chart shows the monthly spending in dollars of a family in the USA on three items in 2010.

The bar chart shows the monthly spending in dollars of a family in the USA on three items in 2010.
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The bar chart gives information about three different kinds of expenses
such
 as
food
, gas, and clothing which were carried out by a family who lived in the USA between
January
 to April in the year of 2010. It was measured
by
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 US
dollars
.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that the
expenditure
 pattern of all three items
was fluctuated
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 over
the
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time.
However
,
while
 the spending money on
food
 markedly decrease, it was considerably elevated
in
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 gas and clothing. In detail, in
January
, around 500 US
dollars
 was spent on
the
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food
 which was the highest amongst other items. Gas and clothing
made
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 only well above 300 US
dollars
 and just above 200 US
dollars
 respectively.
Then
, there was
a
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 up and down trend in spending money on
food
 until it reached the lowest
expenditure
 item in April, at around 300 US
dollars
. Meanwhile, apart from the slight drop in February, it experienced a gradual rise over
the
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time and hit the
second
 most
higest
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highest
 item which
were
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 bought by the people in
US
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 in April
,
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 2010. In terms of clothing, the amount of money
spending
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 on it had increased by nearly 400 US
dollor
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dollars
 from
January
 to February,
then
 it can be observed that there was a sudden fall in that trend , reaching around 300 US
dollars
 which
the
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 least
expenditure
 item in March. Interestingly,
thereafter
, the expenses on clothing dramatically rose and hit the highest point in April, at about 700 US
dollars
.
Also
,based on the bar chart,
although
 there was a fluctuation in
monthy
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monthly
 average
expenditure
 over the span,
at the end
 of April it
was
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notably declined by around 100 US
dollars
 when compared to
January
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words food, january, dollars, expenditure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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