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Some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and communities are become more isolated. Discuss both sides & give your opinion

#people #internet #communities
It has to be noted that
internet
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the internet
 has been very helpful and has brought people
close
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closer
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 For some
,
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 families are separated or live miles away from each other
.
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Internet
 plays a pivotal role for them as
internet
 nowadays is accessible in remote areas
.
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 From remembering birthdays to emails
to
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with
 video chat
,
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 it has been helpful
.
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 Everything nowadays is online through
internet
.
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 Some see
this
 as a plus
point but others
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point, but others
 do not
.
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 Are there any negatives to it
?
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 It is good to be dependent on
internet but
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the internet, but
the internet but
 not over dependent
.
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 People and communities cling to social media and see it as a stamp of validity for acceptance
.
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 We chat with our friends
on
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with
about
 them
,
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 but stay silent when we see them
.
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 The concept of originality
,
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 creativity and conversations is diminishing. People have become isolated in their houses behind a keyboard
.
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.
Internet
 usage has a negative aspect in these
situation
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situations
. The debate
goes
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has been going
 on
forever whether
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forever, whether
internet
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the internet
 is helpful or a hazard
?
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 It depends on how people and communities see them
.
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 In my case
,
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 it has been very helpful in making my life easier and bringing me closer to some old friends and helping me find new ones
.
Accept space
.

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