People spend a lot of money on various things as they earn more money nowadays than before. Is it a positive or negative development?

Over the past few years because of the expansion of advertising people have
interested
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interest
to buy a lot of goods meanwhile that they have to attempt to earn a large amount of money. I personally believe that buying overdo leads to materialism and there is no room for doubt that
this
has a negative development of
humankind
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humankind's
life
.
let's
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Let's
ponder upon the points made in
this
essay.
To begin
with, the advertising industry has increased the spending culture that caused in meet the needs make hard and put pressure on
breadwinner
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the breadwinner
.
Also
, it is difficult to satisfy the various needs and desires that are extended day in, day out, as
fulfillment
a feeling of satisfaction at having achieved your desires
fulfilment
the exponential ambition it can be a bit daunting. People
by
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from
achieving to any things unconsciously tend to want more and more things that
this
is maybe out of their power bound and it
make
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makes
them
depression
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depressed
.
Furthermore
, an assuming people expect more than their duo that it annoys surrounding people
also
they can find contentment in living a simple
life
and even close themselves to nature and its beauties
instead
of spending money on some stuff. Aside from its negative consequences on living expenses and way of
life
more incomes make people reckless and they spend money on unwanted items and gadgets. Buying superfluous stuff resulted in animosity between families or friends as they maybe want to induce their sense of superiority that lead to unhealthy relationships in communities.
For example
for Apple iPhone brand and Samsung cellular phone are the best in
globe but
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globe, but
due to the popularity of the Apple brand
people despite
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people, despite
having Samsung phone are going to buy an Apple iPhone to exhibit others that they use a splendid brand. In conclusion, buying too much and luxurious
life not
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life, not
only leads to raising the expectation and extended the
demands but
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demands, but
also
make a struggle between individuals for excellence and conduct their society to class distinctions that have negative impacts on developed and developing countries.
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