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Recently published figures show that the wildlife population around the world has decreased by around fifty per cent over the last fifty years. What can we do to help protect the wildlife round the world?

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There is no doubt these days the animals are contributing an important part in our earth.
However
, there is a huge decrease in the numbers of the animal world wild. Is considered one of the most controversial issues today. In
this
 essay I am going to examine
this
 phenomenon and suggest many solutions at the end.
First
 of all, we need to understand the causes to lead us to the best solutions.
However
, from my opinion the main causes of the reduction of the
wildlife
 numbers is the burning of forests. A good example of illustrate
that is
 Australia forests burned, that lead to increased amounts of CO2 in the air, which kills the animals.
In addition
, the lake of food, so many animals are suffering after the fire eats most of the plants in the forest, which lead them to starving to death.
However
, the fire some time is happening by natural causes.
Moreover
, it is
also
 possible to say that some of the animals are exposed to some virus.
For example
, China there are many animals exposed to corona virus which make them sick for a long time and
then
 dying.
Furthermore
, in some countries there is no enough water, there is no sea at all, so the
wildlife
 is responsible to search for their own water which considered
also
 one of the causes.
However
, the animal health is the
first
 priority among the all reasons of death.
Finally
, there are a number of solutions we could implement it to protect our
wildlife
 as we can maintain a good environment with enough air and light.
Also
, impose stricter punishment to prevent people from hunting the rare kind of animals as well as the other peaceful animals.
Moreover
, periodic animals checks up and vaccinate them against the very common virus, that killing them. We must take these measurements to reduce the rate of death
wildlife
 in the world.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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