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Some people think high school graduates should travel or work for a period of time instead of going directly to study at university. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both approaches. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is a section of people who believes students should take a break either to get
work
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experience
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 or travel before joining
university
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the university
, whereas some disagree. In
this
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 essay, I shall examine the merits and demerits of the above argument. Young children who
has travelled
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have travelled
 to places or has
work
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experience
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has undoubtedly broaden
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has undoubtedly broadened
 their horizon compared to those who hasn't.
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 is because, schools
hardly gives
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hardly give
 juvenile real-life
experience
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, like talking to stranger, money handling and meeting their needs on their own.
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, travelling enables them to get to know and interact with different people, learn about their different culture and life experiences, which in turn will greatly help them to figure out their field of interest and choose their graduate
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.
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, student’s
work
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experience
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 gives them enormous benefit from working as a team and gives them
opportunity
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the opportunity
an opportunity
 to manage finances.
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, it is evident that children get to learn a
lot which
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lot, which
otherwise
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 not possible by
educational institution
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the educational institution
an educational institution
educational institutions
 by working or travelling to places.
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, there are certain cons allowing youngsters to take up a job early. There are chances that they get accustomed to the
work
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 and due to the earnings they might delay their studies, which will seriously impact their future. And, travelling to different places
may sometimes gives
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may sometimes give
 them various
perspective
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perspectives
 which hinder with their life choices. As they say, less is more, if students are bombarded with many options they might end up choosing
way
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a way
, so proper guidance from
teaches
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teachers
teaching
 or parents is needed here. In conclusion, after looking at the aforementioned arguments, it is clear that working or travelling after schooling apparently has its own positives and negatives,
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 with proper
mentorship
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 we can get rid of the cons.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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