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Adults do very less exercise these days. Some people think that showing sporting events on the television such as Olympics and World Cup tournaments can be the best way to encourage adults to do exercise. Others believe there are other effective ways to do so. Discuss both views and state your opinion

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Nowadays grown ups workout less. It is considered by some people that the appropriate way to persuade adults to
exercise
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 is by making them watch sports like the Olympics and World Cup on TV, whereas others think there are much better methods. In my opinion
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I feel creating
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 awareness to the elderly and regular
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 checkups motivates them to
exercise
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. On the one hand, watching their favourite player in a sport event usually tends people to be more like them.
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, many
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 sports celebrities as idols, so in order to be physically fit like them one has to
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work out
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 will persuade them to 
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 and look after themselves.
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, there are yet many other ways to encourage adults to
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. One way is to provide a
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 awareness campaign for elderly people to keep them updated on the
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 issues while another method is my conducting frequent
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 checkups. To cite an example
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 if they are unhealthy and it shows up in the check up result, they would be motivated to put in extra effort to stay healthy. In order to be so, the adults will themselves go for an
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 without any external pressure.
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, in my
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opinion, I
 feel self motivation is the best way to encourage an adult to
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 and stay fit.
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 for some can be achieved by watching a sports event while for others it might be through monitoring their
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