Some people believe that it is essential to include Physical Education classes in the curriculum for all school-age children. Other think that children's time is better spent more academic subjects. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, Physical Education is seen as an unnecessary subject that children take at schools because of the rise of academic competition, but some people believe it has to be within the educational curriculum because it helps younger students to have a
time
to think in other things and almost, it is a good way to boost physical activity. On the one hand, some people believe children must spend their
time
in
more academic
Suggestion
most academic
subjects,
such
as math, science or physics, and
this
is because of the increasing of competitive skills around the world. Today, young people compete to get a complete scholarship in the best Universities of their countries or of the world.
Thus
, parents are boosting schools to eliminate classes that do not help their children to be the best in some areas. By the other side, others, myself included, consider that it is essential to include sports and different subjects to academic ones because children need a break from studying and a moment to do different activities like some physical activity. In fact, according to a research, school-age children improve their grades in academic subjects when Physical Education is involved in their
curricula
Suggestion
curriculum
.
Also
, if the
time
per week they are doing some exercise is higher, their grades would be much better. To conclude, it is considerably important to involve different subjects in
school's curricula taking
Suggestion
the school's curricula, taking
the school's curricula taking
into account that many studies have
proved
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proven
the improvement of
student's development
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a student's development
the student's development
when they have
time
to do different activities from being
sitting
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sat
in a desk and receiving a lot of academic information. In the same way, Physical Education helps to prevent children's obesity and it is a problem that must be treated in all countries.

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