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Task 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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When a
Men
Suggestion
Man
 or Women get old
Government
 should be paying for their Expenses to
leave
inhabit or live in; be an inhabitant of
live
 in a home with other old people. In my opinion, Getting old is when a
person
get
Suggestion
gets
 to take some rest. The Place they take rest should be where a
person
 don’t need to stay alone and
instead
 a
person
 should enjoy the retirement
age
. In
this
age
 the
person
 will anyway get money from their 401k if they have any savings. In
this
 case they don’t need much help from
government
. If In the case there are no savings for a
person
then
 the help should come from
government
. Because when a
person
 is Young and active he or she might be working and pay taxes to the
government
.
That is
 the income
government
 got from
people
Suggestion
the people
 to run successfully. Where
government
 might be using those kind of taxes from young people for free education, Medication to homeless, Pay for the old, etc. Always there should be a giving and taking kind of process between People and
government
Suggestion
the government
. So once that same Young man
get
Suggestion
gets
 Old
government
 should be helping him back to get his life going happily by taking care of the older citizens expenses.
Government
 can add conditions which
benefits
Suggestion
benefit
government
 - like they only pay to the old
age
 homes to support
old
Suggestion
older
 people. In real life, I saw one of my friends
grandfather
Suggestion
grandfathers
 after his retirement used to stay alone. He
feel
Suggestion
feels
 sick every day and go to see a doctor using the medical care got from
government
Suggestion
the government
.
Then
 they realized “Ideal man’s brain is a devils den” and made him to go to
a
Suggestion
an
 old
age
 home where there are nurses to help
also
 people can find some friends.
Once after
Accept comma addition
Once, after
 going
there
of them or themselves
their
 grandfather is visiting
doctor
Suggestion
the doctor
a doctor
 once in a while only for his regular checkups. Now I conclude It is always very important to make old people smile and I feel it is
governments
Suggestion
government's
 responsibility to take care of them who served the country when they are young and active.
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