In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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When a

Men

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Man

or Women get old

Government

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should be paying for their Expenses to

leave

inhabit or live in; be an inhabitant of

live

in a home with other old people. In my opinion, Getting old is when a

person

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get

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gets

to take some rest. The Place they take rest should be where a

person

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don’t need to stay alone and

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person

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should enjoy the retirement

age

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. In

this

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age

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the

person

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will anyway get money from their 401k if they have any savings. In

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case they don’t need much help from

government

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. If In the case there are no savings for a

person

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then

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the help should come from

government

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. Because when a

person

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is Young and active he or she might be working and pay taxes to the

government

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the income

government

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got from

people

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the people

to run successfully. Where

government

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might be using those kind of taxes from young people for free education, Medication to homeless, Pay for the old, etc. Always there should be a giving and taking kind of process between People and

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government

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the government

. So once that same Young man

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gets

Old

government

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should be helping him back to get his life going happily by taking care of the older citizens expenses.

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can add conditions which

benefits

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benefit

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- like they only pay to the old

age

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homes to support

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older

people. In real life, I saw one of my friends

grandfather

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grandfathers

after his retirement used to stay alone. He

feel

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feels

sick every day and go to see a doctor using the medical care got from

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government

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the government

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they realized “Ideal man’s brain is a devils den” and made him to go to

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old

age

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home where there are nurses to help

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people can find some friends.

Once after

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Once, after

going

there

of them or themselves

their

grandfather is visiting

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the doctor

a doctor

once in a while only for his regular checkups. Now I conclude It is always very important to make old people smile and I feel it is

governments

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government's

responsibility to take care of them who served the country when they are young and active.

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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