some people believe that hobbies need to be difficult to be enjoyable, to what extant do you agree or disagree?

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Hobby are a necessary need for everyone, some group of people thinks that hectic recreational activities are more exhilarating and

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is needed

for your body.

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, I do not agree with

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idea, these activities depend on personality of

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the person

people

to what they do in their free time as a hobby. Pastime activities have different meaning for individuals, some people prefer to sit at home and watch movies, but others like to have more exciting hobbies and they say that it is crucial for your body to release energy by doing difficult or unparalleled hobbies. But we should mention that introvert people may get nervous want to do these activities and they do not enjoy during that

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hobby

. So,

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idea shows that characters of people

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reflects

their type of recreational activities.

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, some of difficult activities do not access easily,

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, body jumping is kind of exciting activities and most of them are built out of town. So, it can be hard to go

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in or at that place

there

every time you want and most of these games are not affordable to play every time you want.

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a few problematic hobbies need three or more people

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, and it makes it difficult to find people as your same taste.

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my point of view, personalities of individuals show their taste of pastime activities so choosing the difficult hobbies do not work for everyone,

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access to these hobbies and cost of them are as hard as finding

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a friend

friends

to do them with you.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.5

Complete response

4.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

253 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

unique challenge
personal growth
mastery
accomplishment
demanding
thrill of achievement
pastimes
fostering
sense of community
mindfulness
stress relief
mental break
daily stressors

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