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Some people believe that is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situation. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

#people #situation #job #shortage #money
The graph represents the
number
 of international students, who studied at North
Dean University
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Dean, University
 from 1999 to 2003. Overall, Chinese and Indian students’
enrollment
 gradually increased for the given
period
 of time, whereas Japanese students’
number
 experienced a downward trend. In 2001, Japanese students’ registration at North
Dean University
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Dean, University
 decreased
in
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to
 its lowest point, where their
number
 declined from 110 to 30 learners. According to
graph
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the graph
, Chinese learners constituted about 53% of
total
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the total number
number
 of international students at the end of the
period
. In 2001, Chinese and Japanese students’ quantities were equal. As graph represents, Indian learners got accepted at North
Dean University
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Dean, University
 about 15 students at the beginning of the
period
.
However
,
this
 trend has increased to 78 students at the end of year 2003. In 1999,
although
 Indian and Chinese numbers were lower than Japanese students, they are managed to increase their applicants’
number
 about 4 times higher than it was in the beginning of the
period
. Their learners’ numbers were 78 and 98, respectively.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Contentment
  • Resilience
  • Personal growth
  • Endurance
  • Initiative
  • Advancement
  • Catalyst
  • Financial stability
  • Status quo
  • Innovation
  • Missed opportunities
  • Life satisfaction
  • Adverse situations
  • Taking control
  • Risk assessment
  • Change management
  • Self-improvement
  • Motivation
  • Stagnation
  • Proactivity
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