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The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six month period in 2011.

The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six month period in 2011.
#inquiries #tourist #information #office #city #six #month #period
Overall
, the number of
inquiries
 in person and
telephone
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by telephone
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 increased over the following six months,
while
 that of
inquiries
 by
letter
/
email
 decreased steadily.
Moreover
, the Tourist Information Office is gotten the best of
inquiry
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inquiries
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 by directing to a customer in June. In January, the figure for
inquiries
 in person initiated over 400
inquiries
, which numbers were lower than that for
letter
/
email
 and
telephone
. Especially, the
inquiries
 were received by
letter
/
email
 and
telephone
 that started
over
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with over
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 600 and 800
inquiries
 respectively. Over the
next
 six months, there was a dramatic rise in the
inquiry
 in person,
and
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reaching a peak at 1900
inquiries
 in June. At the same time, the number of
inquiries
 by
telephone
 reached a plateau at 1000
inquiry
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inquiries
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 in April and went up gradually
at
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to
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 1600 in June.
In contrast
, the
inquiry
 by
letter
/
email
 was gotten that declined steadily
during
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over
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 6 months, and
ending
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ended
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 almost at 400
inquiries

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