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change Is it important change ? what are differences generations?

#change #differences #generations
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If I start by saying that " there is nothing permanent except
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 people would find it a cliché. Whereas, it is an obvious fact that life involves constant
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 and transformation. Since Heraclitus, we know that it is not possible to step into the same river twice.Transformation and
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 is contini
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continuing in time or space without interruption
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 is a meaningless unknown that we all desire
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desire, but
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 fear. Given the big changes in the world,the pe
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ple who are afraid of
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, our parents and their
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, I believe it will be a little clearer and more understandable why I'm talking about
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. Our grandparents lived a more humble life. They grew up in a sincere environment where they spent almost all of their
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 with the their family. In past, p
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the past
e were more trustfu
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trustful, so
trusted each other very much. There were stricter rules than in our
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, but they were
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 firmly committed to the rules. They care more about tradition than we do, and their traditions are more important than ours.They've had harder times like financial troubles, unemployment, family problems etc. Nowadays It's easy to get to something, but that was quite hard back
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. They're almost far away of technological innovations, but they're happy about it.
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 they appreciate technological possibilities, they don't adopt it. They believe it lowers communication and respect . They
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hink children are becoming more disrespectful with new opportunities. we beca
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 more interested in technology so our communication was weak.They love face-to-face communication, believing it to be sincere. Of course, that thought depends on the individual. I think people are more impatie
nt now be
of great significance or value
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cause easier access to information than before,it cre
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tes impatience.
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, it is necessary to adapt quickly for
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to
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 is known to have its good and bad sides, it is a fact that it takes place in our lives. Person changes, society changes, world changes… ‘There is nothing permanent except
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.’ There are so many differences between my
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 and my grandparent’s generations. Today, Life is more comfortable and easier than their
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 for many reason.
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reasons
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 important difference is the
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. My
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's
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 is more different than my grandparent’s
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. In the past, almost all people were uneducated.
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, the
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 was only for men and they did not allow women to learn. But,
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 is very important now.So nowadays,everyb
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dy focus on
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 women play more ac
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a more active role
 society.
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, technology is more advanced than in the past. Nowadays, my
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 spends a lot of
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 in front of the computer, or watching TV.
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,they s
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end most of their
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 chatting with their friends on their mobile phones.But, they didn't have
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 opportunities in the past.So, they spend their
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 on work or their familes
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a social unit living together
families
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.I think ,it is
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ore sincere than today’s. In brief, Even though my grandparent’s
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 and my
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 has some similarities, generally they are different from each other.
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