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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The breakthrough of the agricultural technique helps over product the grains in great amount.
However
, the plights of the starving people in African countries are being constantly reported in
news
Suggestion
the news
. The problems could not be solved by simply shipping the crops and grains to
such
 areas, which does not help the local economy in the long term. Food offering would trigger some unexpected question, like the bankruptcy of the local food suppliers, peasants and grain merchants, by which more people will be unemployed and
then
 more starved.
This
 will increase the reliance of the voluntary supply, making the things into a vicious cycle. Since
this
 is
very systematic problem
Suggestion
a very systematic problem
the very systematic problem
 with multi-challenges, it could never be solved merely
in
Suggestion
on
 the agriculture level. There should be combined efforts of the united nation, forming the expert panels consist of agricultural technicians who help the local
crops planting
Accept comma addition
crops, planting
, economists who can balance the local industrial structure, and experts in many other fields. There should
also
 be some
elites
Suggestion
elite
 teams studying the reasons behind and work out the strategic plan to help solve the problem.
Thus
, being hungry is just the question that surfaces and to get it solved, we can never just see the corner of the iceberg above the water. Theoretically, it could be solved if the
UNis
Suggestion
UN is
determined but
Accept comma addition
determined, but
 practically, there should be systematic solutions, combined efforts and strategic sequence of the tactics.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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