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COMPLETING UNIVERSITY EDUCATION IS THOUGHT BY SOME TO BE THE BEST WAY TO GE A GOOD JOB. ON THE OTHER HAND, OTHER PEOPLE THINK THAT GETTING EXPERIENCE AND DEVELOPING SOFT SKILLS IS MORE IMPORTANT. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

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Some would say that finishing a degree is the number one and competent approach in attaining a better career opportunity.
However
, while
such
 method is perceived as effective, there are people who disa
grees and
Suggestion
disagree
 believes that there is nothing more important than getting
experience
 and strengthening general skills.
This
 essay will discuss both notions. Education is a way to jump-start a future career. It is believed to be an effective means of getting a
job
 because acad
emic institution pro
Suggestion
the academic institution
vides and equip the students with proper and necessary knowledge in accordance to their choice of profession, making them employable. It
also
 serves as an avenue to hone skills be it inherited or learned that can be beneficial for their chosen path towards employment.
On the other hand
,
experience
 and skills
also
 play a role in nailing a
job
 position.
This
 is due to when in w
or
Suggestion
at
k, it is the dexterity and adaptability of a person are what being used. As an example, in retail where an employee has to pacify and handle a dissatisfied consumer; it is the employee’s
experience
 in problem-solving and comforting skills could only resolve
such
 issue. To conclude, education along with capa
bility and
Suggestion
the capability
experience
 matters as criteria in securing a tenure. Personally, both are equally important for a
job
 seeker to embody since candidates cannot have the
experience
 and skills required for a position if an employer cannot hire them because they are missing a basic requirement for the
job
 which is education.

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