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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
Some people think that nowadays we have too many choices. I completely agree with
this
 point of view. In pace with the society
development
, we can satisfy ourselves by the different ways. It is like how we spent our spare time, maybe you could join the different courses, go to travelling and just stay your home use the internet, etc. There is no doubt there are too many ways to choose,
this
 all due to the progress in technology
development
. Just imagine, if you go back to the
last
 century, you may be bored. The people's entertainment was monotonous, and the way of enjoying life is not as good as now, so that could compare the difference in the present and past. It's true, that nowadays we have plentiful choices. The diversity of social
development
 proves that we have many choices. Whether it is technology, culture and production.
For example
, if some companies want to design a car, the manufacture can choose materials to combination from different countries, or the people want to dress up more fashionable, they can choose the clothes and ornaments of different brand. Because we have the opportunity of choices, so that can create various possibilities and promote social advancement. For the most part, nowadays we have many choices,
this
 is not only improved our life, and
also
 promote the country
development
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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