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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

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In today’s busy life, staying in touch with family and friends has become very difficult.
Therefore
, the existence of social networking sites (
such
 as Facebook) proves to be a bliss in today’s time.
However
, not everyone likes the idea and it is considered that
such
 networking sites have had a significant negative influence on both people and society. In my opinion, social networking sites are important and useful, provided these are used wisely and responsibly. Two main factors are behind putting social networking sites into bad light.
First
 is, it allows people to look into other individual’s personal life, like photos and videos.
In other words
, if someone has not set up appropriate restrictions on his or her account, it gives easy access to their account and
therefore
, anyone can look into the person’s online data.
This
 may lead to several criminal or fraudulent activities
such
as, robbery,
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as robbery,
 kidnapping, etc. The
second
 factor, linked to the
first
, is the social pressure under which a person is forced to put his personal information (like, photos, whereabouts, etc.)
on
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On
 the social media site.
This
 means, in order to maintain his social symbol, an individual would try to show off how happy and content his life is by posting pictures,
for example
, photos of his foreign location, new gifts or presents’ pictures, etc.
Such
 desires may sometime lead to frictions in relationships when an individual starts caring too much for the social status rather than actually focussing on true relations. The whole idea and concept of social networking sites is to connect people around the world, so that distance would not matter anymore.
However
, as our world is
mix
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a mix
 of good and bad intent people, it is important to be careful and watchful. In conclusion,
although
 social networking sites give us
chance
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a chance
the chance
 to stay closer and connected to our family and friends, they can lead to a huge negative impact on both individuals and society if not used with proper settings or restrictions on the account.

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