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The continued rise in the world’s population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present. What are the causes of this continued rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?

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Some people opine that the most pronounced issue that the humankind is facing today is the persistent rise in
population
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 and in my opinion it is true. Numerous factors can be attributed to the surge in
population
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, including unavailability of required medical facilities and unawareness among people. The continuously growing
population
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 is a matter of grave concern encountered by several nations and
more remarkably the
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more remarkably, the
 ones belonging to relatively lower socioeconomic strata.
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 is because birth control, to a great extent, depends upon the access of citizens to medical facilities like family planning clinics. The communities deprived of
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 services tend to be unaware of contraceptive methods.
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 in some parts of
countries
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the countries
 the facilities have been made available, individuals lack awareness. Unless they are guided
properly they
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properly, they
 will not understand the benefits of using birth control. The consequences of the growing
population
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 have made it evident that it is the biggest problem that we are facing. In order to accommodate the needs of the growing populace, we have to over exploit natural resources and
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 leads to scarcity of water, electricity etc. Unemployment is another dreadful outcome making overpopulation a notably significant issue. The inadequacy of health care and the failure of social services to reach out to the people are the main grounds responsible for
overgrowth
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the overgrowth
 of
population
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 and its aftereffects. Making people aware of the existing facilities and promoting the small family concept are the best possible ways to counter
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