In many countries women no longer feel the need to get married. Some people believe that this is because women are able to earn on their own income and therefore do not require the financial security marriage can bring. To what extent do you agree?

Marriage is
very vital bond
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a very vital bond
the very vital bond
between two souls.
in
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In
this
modern era, a man has progressed from working barefooted in the jungle to take
first step
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the first step
on the Moon.
Nevertheless
, there
are
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is
some issue which
remain
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remains
irrovacable
incapable of being retracted or revoked
irrevocable
and as complex as ever. The given topic asserts that, woman who earned money; should not get married. I shall explore the same by various aspects in upcoming paragraph.
To begin
with, there is a group of people who believe that,
womens
an adult female person (as opposed to a man)
women
no number feel any need to get married.
Firstly
, they
convincing
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are convinced
are convincing
convince
their viewpoint by claiming that, woman lost their trust from married
life
, because of domestic violence. Dowry system is the main reason behind
this
action. Girls are scolded and get ill-treated by their 'in laws'.
This
is proved by a survey conducted by
Indian government
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the Indian government
that, most of the
womens
an adult female person (as opposed to a man)
women
are mentally upset after getting married. They
do not allowed
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do not allow
to communicate with friends.
This
is all because of
pressure
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the pressure
imposed by the 'in laws'.
Furthermore
, females
also
believe that, after marriage, their dreams would be
vanished
expel from a community or group
banished
. They never achieved their goals which they
makes
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make
in their
life
.
Moreover
, they have to be totally dedicated to their family and children as well. They would not have any time to spend with their parents. From another aspect, they are now well educated and doing well jobs equally as male.
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They
also
have similar opportunities for employment. Now, they are eligible to make
good
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a good
earning, and
also
, more self confident.
That is
why they feel reluctance, when
question
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the question
a question
arises on getting married. While, in earlier time,
womens
an adult female person (as opposed to a man)
women
were not educated as today, and they
must had
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must have
to depend on their
life
partner. But, now nothing is happening like
this
. To recapitulate, we can see that, there are
number
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a number
of answers to
this
question. On balance,
however
,
womens have
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women shave
their own
life
. No one has any right to pressurise them for getting married. It should be their own choice. So that, they never regret on their decision in their whole
life
.

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