In many countries women no longer feel the need to get married. Some people believe that this is because women are able to earn on their own income and therefore do not require the financial security marriage can bring. To what extent do you agree?

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Marriage is

very vital bond

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a very vital bond

the very vital bond

between two souls.

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this

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modern era, a man has progressed from working barefooted in the jungle to take

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first step

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the first step

on the Moon.

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, there

are

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some issue which

remain

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remains

irrovacable

incapable of being retracted or revoked

irrevocable

and as complex as ever. The given topic asserts that, woman who earned money; should not get married. I shall explore the same by various aspects in upcoming paragraph.

To begin

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with, there is a group of people who believe that,

womens

an adult female person (as opposed to a man)

women

no number feel any need to get married.

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, they

convincing

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are convinced

are convincing

convince

their viewpoint by claiming that, woman lost their trust from married

life

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, because of domestic violence. Dowry system is the main reason behind

this

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action. Girls are scolded and get ill-treated by their 'in laws'.

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is proved by a survey conducted by

Indian government

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the Indian government

that, most of the

womens

an adult female person (as opposed to a man)

women

are mentally upset after getting married. They

do not allowed

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do not allow

to communicate with friends.

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is all because of

pressure

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the pressure

imposed by the 'in laws'.

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, females

also

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believe that, after marriage, their dreams would be

vanished

expel from a community or group

banished

. They never achieved their goals which they

makes

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make

in their

life

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, they have to be totally dedicated to their family and children as well. They would not have any time to spend with their parents. From another aspect, they are now well educated and doing well jobs equally as male.

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They

also

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have similar opportunities for employment. Now, they are eligible to make

good

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a good

earning, and

also

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, more self confident.

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why they feel reluctance, when

question

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the question

a question

arises on getting married. While, in earlier time,

womens

an adult female person (as opposed to a man)

women

were not educated as today, and they

must had

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must have

to depend on their

life

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partner. But, now nothing is happening like

this

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. To recapitulate, we can see that, there are

number

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a number

of answers to

this

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question. On balance,

however

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womens have

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women shave

their own

life

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. No one has any right to pressurise them for getting married. It should be their own choice. So that, they never regret on their decision in their whole

life

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Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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339 words

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The pictures show information about average income and spending on food and clothes by an average family in a city in the UK

Some people feel that the private lives of celebrities should not be openly shared by the media. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that all lawbreakers should be taken into prison. In contrast, others believe there are better alternatives (for example, doing work or learning skills in the community). Discuss both views and give your opinion.