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Foreign language should be part of curriculum of the school. Do you agree or disagree?

#language #part #curriculum #school
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Educalion
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Education
 is the rudimentary right of every
student
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 which decide the carrier of
student
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 and ultimately Of country. In
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scenario whater
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scenario, whether
scenario whether
 the
student
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persue
carry out or participate in an activity; be involved in
pursue
pursues
 a foreign
language
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 at a time of
academic career
Suggestion
an academic career
 is most issue.
This
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evelutaed
evaluate or estimate the nature, quality, ability, extent, or significance of
evaluated
 both the side of
aarguments
a fact or assertion offered as evidence that something is true
arguments
a arguments
argument
 and end up by the
satment
a message that is stated or declared; a communication (oral or written) setting forth particulars or facts etc
statement
.
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 with
,
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,
 if we talk
about
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about education, it
about education as it
education
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 it has transcended national barriers and enhance its scope
globally
Suggestion
global
. In
such
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 a scenario learning a foreign
language
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 could help to enhance their area of knowledge.
For example
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,
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,
 in my city emphasize on a foreign
language
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 as a part of
curriculum
Suggestion
the curriculum
a curriculum
 to make the students
compitative
Suggestion
competitors
competitive
competitor
 to
compt
compete for something; engage in a contest; measure oneself against others
compete
 with today's fast moving world.
Furthermore
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,
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,
 there are
benefitial
Suggestion
benefits
beneficial
 for adding a foreign
language
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 in academic to those who are planning to
migrat
move from one country or region to another and settle there
migrate
migrated
 abroad for
them
of them or themselves
their
 tertiary
education
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.
Such
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student
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 becomes
multilanguagestic
Suggestion
student
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 who could
persue
carry out or participate in an activity; be involved in
pursue
peruse
parse
golble
eat hastily without proper chewing
gobble
gable
gullible
interactions which
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interactions, which
 help to them at the lateral stage. On the
contary
very opposed in nature or character or purpose
contrary
,
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,
 other Opined that in
such
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 practice could change the
impottance
the quality of being important and worthy of note
importance
impedance
 of
mother toung
Suggestion
the mother town
mother town
mother young
mother thong
 along with culture and tradition. It
also
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 hike the cost of
education
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 which is
not effort by
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not an effort by
 poor parents. In
addit
a fully developed person from maturity onward
adults
audit
adult
, it
mount
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mounts
 the burden of
education
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 where students are unable to get time for
leasure
time available for ease and relaxation
leisure
 activity which could
drawn
Suggestion
draw
 them to
dark side
Suggestion
the dark side
. The
student
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 may get district from their important subjects which impact on their results. Agglomerating all the points elaborated above
,
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,
 it can be concluded that learning a foreign
language
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 could vital for the
student
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 towards
therie
of them or themselves
their
there
 carrier. More they gain
,
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,
 more they evolved as "
Education
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 is not the
ending but
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ending, but
 it is the end of beginning "

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