A government has a responsibility to its citizens to ensure their safety. Therefore, some people think the government should increase spending on social benefits. To what extent do you agree?

Goverment

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The government

Government

of each country has a huge role in ensuring public safety.

However while

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However, while

i

refers to the speaker or writer

I

believe that

goverment

the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit

government

is taking steps to continue welfare, I agree that they have to increase spending on social benefits.

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In

this

essay we will understand the importance of increasing spending on social benefits. On the one

hand there

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hand, there

is ample, powerful, almost daily evidence that

such

technology can be

detrimental especially

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detrimental, especially

to the younger generation who are more easily affected by

it’s

of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"

its

addictive nature and which can result in people feeling more isolated from the society. The central reason behind

this

is twofold,

firstly

, the invention of online social media sites and apps,

such

as Twitter and Facebook have reduced crucial face-to-face interactions dramatically. Through use of these appealing and attractive mediums, people feel in touch and connected yet lack key social skills and the ability to communicate.

Secondly

, dependence on

such

devices is built up frighteningly easily which may have a damaging effect on mental health and encourage a sedentary lifestyle.

For example

, recent scientific research by the UK government demonstrated that 90% of people in their 30s spend over 20 hours per week on Messenger and similar applications to chat with their friends

instead

of meeting up and spending quality time together or doing sport.

As a result

, it is conclusively clear that these

technology

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technological

advancements have decreased and diminished our real life interactions.

On the other hand

,

although

there are significant downsides to technological developments, its’ multifold advantages cannot be denied.

This

is largely because the popularity of technology

such

as

cellphones

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cell phones

allows people to connect freely and easily with no geographical barriers. People are able to share any type of news, information, photos and opinions with their loved ones whenever and wherever

they want

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they want, therefore

therefore

keeping a feeling of proximity and closeness.

For example

, an extensive study by Oxford University illustrated that people who work, or study abroad and use applications like Facetime and WhatsApp to chat with their families, are less likely to experience loneliness and feel out of the loop than those who do not. Consistent with

this

line of thinking is that businessmen are

also

undoubtedly able to benefit from these advances by holding virtual real -time meetings using

Skype which

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Skype, which

may increase the chance of closing business deals without the need to fly. From the arguments and examples given I firmly believe that overall communication and mans’ sociability has been advanced enormously due to huge the huge technological progress of the past twenty years and despite some potentially serious health implications which governments should not fail to address, it is predicted that its popularity will continue to flourish in the future.