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The graph shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph represents the proportion of the population
aged
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of
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65 between 1940 to 2040.
Population
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 has
becoming
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 a major key role as it has covered
their
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age
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 of 65 and
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 in three different countries. The data suggests
the
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 developed countries like
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USA
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the USA
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,
Japan
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 and
Sweden
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 where
they
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have
different
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contribution
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 from 5% to 9% of the
age
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 people over 65 in 1940.
Precautionally
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, the group of people getting increased
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% and 9% in
population
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a population
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 of
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USA
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the USA
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 and
Sweden
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while
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Japan
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 has nearly4% a little upward in the country. Apparently, the
USA
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Sweden
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becomes
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 near to 15% and 14% in the period of 1980 to 2000 and
Japan
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 has
same
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as
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 4%. At the
age
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 of
2040
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 there would be a sudden change where
Japan
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 becomes one of the
top
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, at the
age
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 of 65 and above increased more than 25%, contrary
USA
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 and
Sweden
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 has
having
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 25% to 23%. On the whole, the data of the oldest group of people have been availed in
Japan
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 rather than the
USA
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 and
Sweden
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 90%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, usa, japan, sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • aging population
  • proportion
  • elderly
  • significant increase
  • surpass
  • gradual increase
  • crucial period
  • rapid increase
  • healthcare advancements
  • lower birth rates
  • projections
  • adjustments in social services
  • demographic dynamics
  • lifestyle choices
  • trends
  • notable
  • potentially
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