The graph shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between

1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make

comparisons where relevant.
The graph represents the proportion of the population
aged
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of
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65 between 1940 to 2040.
Population
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has
becoming
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a major key role as it has covered
their
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age
of 65 and
over explained
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in three different countries. The data suggests
the
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developed countries like
USA
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the USA
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,
Japan
and
Sweden
where
they
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have
different
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contribution
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from 5% to 9% of the
age
people over 65 in 1940.
Precautionally
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, the group of people getting increased
10
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% and 9% in
population
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a population
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of
USA
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the USA
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and
Sweden
while
Japan
has nearly4% a little upward in the country. Apparently, the
USA
and
Sweden
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near to 15% and 14% in the period of 1980 to 2000 and
Japan
has
same
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as
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4%. At the
age
of
2040
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there would be a sudden change where
Japan
becomes one of the
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, at the
age
of 65 and above increased more than 25%, contrary
USA
and
Sweden
has
having
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25% to 23%. On the whole, the data of the oldest group of people have been availed in
Japan
rather than the
USA
and
Sweden
.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, usa, japan, sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • aging population
  • proportion
  • elderly
  • significant increase
  • surpass
  • gradual increase
  • crucial period
  • rapid increase
  • healthcare advancements
  • lower birth rates
  • projections
  • adjustments in social services
  • demographic dynamics
  • lifestyle choices
  • trends
  • notable
  • potentially
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