In many societies, elderly people often live in retirement homes. This is not appropriate because families should always care for their aging members. Do you agree?

#societies #people #retirement #homes #families #care #members

In the modern world, the love and affection of children towards their parents

is fading

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are fading

away. They don't care about their old parents and are only busy in earning more and more money. Due to which they don't have a choice and are forced to live in retirement homes.

This

is so cruel and disheartening and I am strongly against

this

behaviour of children. Our parents did everything for our happiness. They sacrificed their own happiness just for our sake. Whatever we are today and whatever we can do is all because of them. Even after knowing everything their children behave badly with them in their

oldage

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old age

. It should be our responsibility to take care of those who made us what we are today. We should always respect them and help them in everything.

Thu Feb 06 2020

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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1Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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In many societies, elderly people often live in retirement homes. This is not appropriate because families should always care for their aging members. Do you agree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Write about your experience when you went to your dream holiday before. Talk about How you get there? What you saw? What you did? Where you stayed? How long you stayed?

Some people belive that too many resources and attention are devoted to the protection of wild animals and birds. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that social networking sites have a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some companies have uniforms for their staff which must be worn at all times. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this.