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In general people do not have such a close relationship with their neighbours as they did in the past. Why is this so and what can be done to improve contact between neighbours?

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These days people tend to spend less
time
 interacting with their neighbours as compared to past times.
This
 essay will discuss busy work schedule as its primary reason and implementing regulation on working hours by government to enhance
relation
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relationships
 with
person
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the person
people
a person
 living
next
 door. Hectic schedule left people with no
time
 to mingle with other in their neighbourhood. Workers are putting extra hours at
job
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a job
 to make ends meet. Most of the middle class has either no or minimum spare
time
, and they prefer to spend those hours with their family. According to
recent study
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a recent study
recent studies
, average
time
 spent
at
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on
 employment by an individual has increased to 70% as compared to previous
time
. In order to provide commoners with more recreational
time
, government need to apply
cap
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the cap
a cap
 on numbers of hours a person can work. With
this
 implementation, not only an individual will have enough
time
 to gather with their
neighbours but
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neighbours, but
also
, with relaxation his
production
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productive
 outcome at work will increase. In conclusion, spending extra
time
 at employment leads to less interaction among neighbours these
days but
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days, but
this
 can be improved through government by merely managing
number
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a number
the number
 of employment hours.
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