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1) Studies have shown that in many countries the income gap between the rich and poor is ever increasing. • What problems can arise from this situation and what could be done to address this situation?

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Dear Sir / Madam, I am elated to inform you that the trip you arranged for us in Switzerland was marvellous. I am writing
this
 letter to thank you for arranging
such
 a memorable vacation and few suggestions which might help you enhance your service in future.
To begin
 with, our Switzerland premium tour package had everything that we ever wanted to cover in our family vacation. The snow skating in the mount Titlis, city tour in the Luzern city was worth commemorating the whole life. All of us thoroughly enjoyed the accommodation, food and the city tours. Not to forget, our kids loved the swiss chocolates as per your recommendation.
However
, being in
such
 a cold country with small, fragile children is indeed challenging. I was expecting a child care assistance number in case of emergency but, could not find any.
Therefore
, I had to carry all of the precautionary aids for the children throughout the journey which was quite uncomfortable. It would be really helpful if you could assist the new mothers with a 24 / 7 help line they could enjoy their trip with their newborns. Once again, thank you so much and I hope, you find
this
 feedback insightful and work upon it.

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