Many people think that every individual is responsible for their happiness, but people believe there are other external factors that influence us . Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Many
psychologist s
and neuroscientists believe that happiness is a choice and circumstances cannot direct a person to be sad or elated. Correct your spelling
psychologists
However
, some believe, there are various factors, which can make a jovial person, gloomy. I am in accord, with Linking Words
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opinion, as I believe, human beings have Correct article usage
the former
power
to control their emotions. In the composition, both aspects will be discussed with pros and cons. To embark upon, some experts assume, many external circumstances, are responsible, for a person to remain joyful or depressed. These may be, Change the article
the power
loss
of Correct article usage
the loss
job
or a loved one, divorce, poverty, physical or mental debility and any kind of physical or mental abuse. Add an article
a job
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, people who just lost their only childLinking Words
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may go into Remove the comma
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deep
depression, Add an article
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this
may lead to various psychosomatic disorders. Correct pronoun usage
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, patients who are Linking Words
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in
wheelchair
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wheelchairs
,
can be anxious and without hope, leading to chronic depression. In Remove the comma
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such
conditions, it is very difficult to remain happy and positive. Linking Words
On the contrary
, few believe that our mind controls what we think, we can remain happy no matter what Linking Words
situations
are. No circumstances or situations can make us Correct article usage
the situations
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our joy. One of the famous, neuroscientists, named Dr Caroline Leaf, has written a book, switch on your brain. Replace the word
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This
book explains that no matter what may be the situation, our response to it determines Linking Words
us
whether we are joyous or unhappy. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Furthermore
, there are many videos, posted by a famous speaker Nick, who does not have arms or Linking Words
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and he Fix the agreement mistake
legs
tells
that Verb problem
says
secret
to Correct article usage
the secret
remain
happy lies within. Despite Wrong verb form
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of
his impaired body form, he is more energetic and happy. He never regrets Change preposition
apply
for
anything. In conclusion, I believe, Remove the preposition
apply
what
we think in our heart, we shall be so, Correct word choice
that what
hence
we have to choose to be in a state of happiness, no matter what comes in front of Linking Words
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