today,most people get married and give birth in their thirties rather than when they are young. is it a positive or negative development in your opinion ? to what extent do you support this development?

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In the salad days of
millenium
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the millennium
millennium
the society is polarised into two groups almost equally regarding the notion whether should give
birth
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at thirties or at a younger age.
different
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Different
pople
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
have their distinct mindset.
the
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The
following paragraphs would shed light on both the positive and negative sides before making a final note. To commence with the
first
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notion
,
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,
there are
myraid
too numerous to be counted
myriad
things to be shared in its favour.
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first
preceding all others in time or space or degree
First
and foremost
reason giving
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reason, giving
birth
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at
thirities
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
authorities
thirties
arthritis
makes the parental bond strong,
as a result
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no divorce case arises.
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secondly having
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Secondly, having
Secondly having
a minimum bank balance is important to
upbring
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the children.
shifting
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Shifting
towards the
second
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school of thought if the couple decides to give
birth
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at
younger age
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a younger age
younger ages
with
improper mindset
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an improper mindset
affects on children
,
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,
hence
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without having a proper view on the responsibilities of children should not agree to give
birth
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.
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therefore
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Therefore
taking time and giving
birth
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is a positive
devlopment
act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining
development
but should not exceed beyond thirties.
having
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Having
discussed both the views
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
would like to infer that giving
birth
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is a
perosnal
concerning or affecting a particular person or his or her private life and personality
personal
thing at what age they should give
birth
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it will totally depend upon on the couples.
hammering
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Hammering
the
last
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nail
,
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
personally feel that giving
birth
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at thirties is a positive development.

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