Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem.

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Nowadays, one of the major concerns that people are facing is that they don't get enough
time
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to live a healthy life by doing
exercise
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, which is
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first step
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the first step
a first step
of keeping the diseases away. Apart from that, most people
beleive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
that they get very short or no
exercise
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either while the day they are working or the
time
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when they are free which, afterwards result in health issues. In
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essay, I will discuss why people
not get
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don't get
aren't getting
time
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for
exercise
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and the solution for
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problem.
Firstly
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, one of the main reasons why working people do not get proper
time
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to do
exercise
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is that many people prefer to do
12 hours shift
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a 12 hour shift
12 hour shift
so that they can get overtime.
Although
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,
this
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habit of doing overtime seems beneficial for earning more
money
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, but we can't buy everything with
money
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.
In other words
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, people focus only on
money
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rather than their health.
For example
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, the old saying " Heath is Wealth" which means if there is
health
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healthy
, only
then
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we are able to earn
money
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. To avoid
this
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problem, people should try to come
home
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early and spend some
time
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doing a good
exercise
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.
Secondly
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, when people have some free
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on the weekends, they devote their
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to their family responsibility. The solution for
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problem can be that they should try to balance their
time
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equally between their family family and
exercise
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.
Moreover
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, people who are mainly working in their own company or in the offices, when they come
home
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, they feel stressed because they get so much work to do at
home
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too,
that is
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why people are unable to do
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exercise
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the exercise
.
However
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, if people try to finish their work at the office, there is a
possibilty
a future prospect or potential
possibility
that they get some
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for the gym.
Finally
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, some people think that going to
gym
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the gym
is worthless as it is
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wasting and less entertaining for them.
Therefore
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, people can do the dance activity which is more entertaining and a good
exercise
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for people too.
For instance
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, pressing the button of T.V.
remote
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Remote
is a form of
exercise
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too that
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too, that
helps in improving hand co-ordination skills. In conclusion, I think that, if people do not get
time
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to go to
gym
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the gym
or doing
exercise
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at
home
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, they should find the other ways to keep them fit and healthy through the other forms of
exercise
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Time constraints
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Passive leisure activities
  • Workplace wellness programs
  • Active commuting
  • Subsidized
  • Public awareness
  • Health benefits
  • Incentivizing
  • Accessible public spaces
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