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In many countries, as people are earning more these days they are also spending money in buying more and more items. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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I think it is
an
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a
 positive look why because now a
days
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day
 cost of living has been increased dramatically, to cope with the of cost of living people has to earn a lot. There is no harm in buying more items, ideally those items will be used by people only. Earning more will leads to the positive development not with negative one. Coming to the items which people buy, They should be useful to the people but not been wasted. And there are very few jobs where you can earn more money, find
job
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a job
jobs
 would be very difficult.To conclude, Earning more and buying more items will
leads
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lead
 to the positive outcome for the career and life. On summary, People can earn a lot and buy more items. There is no issue or harm to do things because of
current cost
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the current cost
 of living in the society.

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