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People should never eat meat because rising animals for human consumption is cruel. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#people #meat #animals #consumption
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Since ancient times, our ancestors ate
meat
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 so I don’t think that people will stop eating
meat
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. But still I think that eating animal
meat
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 is very cruel compared to
animal
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an animal
animals
. People turn
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into
 animals very cruelly eating their
meat
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. And I am partially against
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 because I think that people without
meat
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 will not be able to
live
go away from a place
leave
 because I think that
meat
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 contains some vitamins that give strength to people.
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, I am against
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 because I believe that
meat
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 is very harmful to humans if sanitary rules are not followed. Many
meat
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 factories do not comply with sanitary standards.
due
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 to which,
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, a lot of bacteria are formed in the
meat
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 that harm the body and human health. I don’t trust
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 factories because I often see in the news how they are small and after that it becomes terribly disgusting. In conclusion, the
meat
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 may be very tasty, but make sure the quality of the
meat
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. And do not eat a lot of
meat
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. If you love and respect nature.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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