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The two graph show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s.

The two graph show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s.
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The provided two pie charts demonstrate the proportional distribution of
the
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energy
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 sources, namely oil, natural
gas
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, coal, and new alternatives in the USA in percentages between
1980s
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 and 1990s.
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, it can be clearly observed that oil recommended itself as a basic source of using
energy
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 followed by natural
gas
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 and
gas
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.
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, the alternative source of
energy
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 namely hydroelectric
power
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 and nuclear
power
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 demonstrated the most dramatic changes.
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, the need for nuclear
power
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 usage doubled noticeably during a decade. Now, turning to the details, the amount of
energy
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 made by oil was just below half of the total
energy
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(42%) which dropped by 8% and was the most useful source
also
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 in 1990.
On the other hand
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, the percentage of
energy
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 gained from natural
gas
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 decreased by 1% in 10 years and it accounted for
one quarter
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 of total
energy
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.
Additionally
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, coal and nuclear
power
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 are the two categories of sources which increased their
energy
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 production by 5% in a decade and finished the period at 27% and 10% respectively. Hydroelectric
power
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, which accounted for only 5% of total
energy
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 production in 1980, remained unchanged over the
10 year
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10-year
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 time frame.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "additionally".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, gas, power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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