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In some countries children have very strict rules of behavior, while in other countries they are allowed to do almost anything they want. To what extent should children have to follow rules?

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Children are one of the most fundamental elements that decide a future of the country. So guiding children to the right path will ensure the country’s development and the society’s goodwill. Some countries will allow students to follow their own will which
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 advantageous rather than forcing them to follow some strict rules. Rules are important for any child as they are new to the society and they will not have much knowledge about right or wrong. Every child should have his freedom in choosing their career, interests and hobbies which they want to continue
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. Parents play an important role in implying rules and regulations in a child’s
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. Parents shall allow kids to follow their dreams and help them to build their future.
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, providing freedom and allowing them to do almost anything they want may divert them
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 some bad phases of the society. The
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 as family, teachers, friends and well-wishers who are a part of the kid’s
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 should take good care of the path he/she chooses. In some countries, the children are forced to follow some strict rules which would result in anxiety. The child would be very curious to know about the things he/she is prevented to do.
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, in some colleges in India, the students are not allowed to communicate to the opposite genders.
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 rule has oppressed the students from knowing each other. These students when pass out
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 the college and enter the real world where they will have to communicate with all genders will have issues and will affect their
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 the conclusion, children are allowed to do follow their interest and should be allowed to do almost everything they
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 there should be some guidance of an adult in their
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 who wishes best for them.
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, the student who follow very strict rules may have
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