the chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995 to 2002

the chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995 to 2002
The provided graph reveals the
overall
telephone calls in
minutes
performed by the British nation in terms of 3 ways: local, national and international and mobile, over a span of 7 years between 1995 and 2002. Generally, it is clearly observed that the local-fixed line was the most popular way of communication throughout the whole period, followed by the national and international-fixed
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. One particularly interesting fact highlighted by the figure
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there was a dramatic rise in
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local calls from about 70
billion
minutes
in 1995, reaching its peak at around 90 million in 1999,
however
, the remaining period brought a slight decline to a mere 70
billion
minutes
in 2002.
Whereas
, the national and international calls witnessed a progressive climb over the period starting from just 30
billion
minutes
in 1995 to
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more than 60
billion
minutes
in 2002. By far the most popular communication method between the British people
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century was mobiles, which witnessed a drastic surge from just less than 5
billion
minutes
in 1995 to about 45
billion
minutes
in 2002.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number
  • minutes
  • telephone calls
  • UK
  • divided into
  • categories
  • from
  • to
  • overall
  • increased significantly
  • local fixed-line calls
  • accounted for
  • largest proportion
  • throughout
  • period
  • international calls
  • highest rate of growth
  • experiencing
  • sharp increase
  • national long-distance calls
  • remained relatively stable
  • slight decline
  • towards
  • end
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