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Universities should allocate the same amount of money to students' sports activities as they allocate to their libraries. To what extent do you agree with this view? Give reasons for your answer and give any relevant example or experience you have to support your answer.

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It is often seen that universities provide the best education to their students and prepare them as the ideal citizens of the nation. They
also
 focus on physical health by offering them various sports facilities. Some people argue that sports are equally important and must have the same allocation of funds as university libraries.
However
, others state that main aptitude of educational institutions is to provide lofty education and must invest handsome amount for the betterment of libraries. I agree to some extent that role of the library is far more important than sports activities. It is very important to have
good physical education
Suggestion
a good physical education
 for students. It will not only improve their
health but
Accept comma addition
health, but
also
 helped them in developing skills
such
 as teamwork, handling pressure under tensed situations etc.
Therefore
, it is required by the universities to spend on
this
 constituent.
Furthermore
, nowadays there is too much study pressure on students. In order to relax and re-energise,
such
 activities should be provided at a regular interval.
Library
Suggestion
The library
A library
 is an essential part of every educational institution. Large numbers of students rely on libraries to complete their assignments, research works and final projects. It shows that
existence
Suggestion
the existence
 of a university is incomplete without having one or more libraries in it.
Thus
, a huge amount should be invested in libraries to improve its books catalogue. Latest books, journals and other reference materials should be incorporated in libraries to facilitate its users. To sum up, I would like to say that spending time in libraries is more
worthful
suggestive of youth; vigorous and fresh
youthful
hurtful
 and has lofty values than playing. Universities must upgrade their
libraries accordance with
Suggestion
libraries in accordance with
 technological advancement without considering the cost so that numerous benefits could be taken out.
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