The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarize this information by selecting and reporting the main feautures and make comparison where relevant.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities.

Summarize this information by selecting and reporting the main feautures and make comparison where relevant.
This
line graph and table graph are providing information about the
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monthly temperature and the
approximately
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rate of
hours
of sun over a period of twelve months in
London
, New
York
and
Sydney
.
Overall
, it can be seen that
in
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the temperature in
Sydney
was relatively higher at the beginning and end of the period.
Furthermore
,
London
and New
York
experienced an upward trend in the middle of the period. In January,
Sydney
experienced a number of above 25 degrees. From here, it gradually dropped to 15 in July.
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the end, it showed an increase to exactly 25 in December, with 20 more than New
York
.
London
started with nearly 10 in January, with approximately 5 less than New
York
. New
York
exceed the rate of
London
in April and reached a peak of nearly 30 in July, with 5 higher than
London
.
Finally
, both
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states experienced a downward trend to a rate of 10 and 5, they came down to the same number as in January. The total sunshine was respectively higher in New
York
, with a number of 2535.
On
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the
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second
place came
Sydney
, with 2473
hours
.
London
considered
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to be with more than
less
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hours
of sun, with 1180
hours
.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, london, york, sydney with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.

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