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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You have a full-time job and you are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to your teachers. In your letter describe the situation explain why you cannot continue at this time say what action you would like to take You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ................. ,

#minutes #job #course #teachers #situation #time #action #addresses
Dear
Mr.
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 Rasa, I am Sahar XXX , one of your
student
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students
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 in
evening
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the evening
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 course class. I am writing
this
 letter to describe why I can not attend more
in
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you
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 interesting and knowledgeable course. As you know , I am a reservoir engineer and
also
 I have
a twins
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 that
they
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are three years old. The good news is that recently I got a promotion and now I am working as a lead
of
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reservoir engineer but the bad point is that I am too busy now due to my promotion. would you remember that mostly I was overtime
.
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 Even I
sometime
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 had not
do
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 my homework. And now, the situation gets worse. My new responsibility requires
to
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 work overtime.
Moreover
, I have to attend more meetings
that
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than
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they
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can take several hours to reach suitable decisions. So if I have any spare time I prefer to spend it with my children. Unfortunately, I
inclined
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 to postpone my study to
other
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another
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 more suitable
time
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.
In addition
,
last
 day I called to administration secretary and pressed her that I want the full refund of all the amount paid for enrolling
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 course and she told me it was possible only when your teacher sign
you
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your
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 amendment letter. Dealing with mind the circumstance I trust that you will kindly sign my attached demand letter. I am pleasantly thankful for
you
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your
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 kindness.
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Yours
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Your
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Yours
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 sincerely, SaharXXX

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