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There is growing demand for fresh water nowadays and this is becoming a global problem. what are the causes and solutions.?

#demand #water
It is true that the demand of fresh
water
 is increasing in every corner of the world and will increase
further
 in
the
Suggestion
The
 future.
This
 is becoming a world-wide problem. In
this
 essay
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will state causes of
this
 and will provide solutions to encounter it in the following paragraphs. To embark with, due to increase in
population
 and climate change has led to the problem of
shortage
Suggestion
a shortage
 of fresh
water
.
Firstly
, usage and
consumtion
the process of taking food into the body through the mouth (as by eating)
consumption
 of
water
 has been increased exponentially from the past. As more and more people are adding to
population
Suggestion
the population
, ground
water
 levels are decreasing.
Secondly
, excessive cutting of trees and burning forests for development has disturbed eco-logical balance.
For example
, in
delhi
a city in north central India
Delhi
, outskirts are being developed by clearing forest to
accomodate
be agreeable or acceptable to
accommodate
increasing
Suggestion
the increasing population
population
.
As a result
, rainfall
are getting
Suggestion
is getting
 affected. Talking about solutions of above causes,
firstly
, people needs to be taught the importance of fresh
water
, So that they won't waste it.
This
 awareness will make them use
water
 wisely.
Secondly
,
government
Suggestion
the government
 should make laws to protect forests in order to maintain eco-logical balance.
Thirdly
, people should opt a habit of saving rain
water
 as it is the only option have reserves of
water
 for those countries, whose geographical location are away from
sea
Suggestion
the sea
. To illustrate
,
Accept space
,
in Delhi,
government
Suggestion
the government
 has alarmed people of
water
 scarcity and told them for
water
 harvesting. To conclude, increasing demand of fresh
water
 is mainly due to
over
too much population
overpopulation
population
 and human activities on forests.
However
, people and
goverments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
 should come together to opt above measures to lessen the problem
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