Many elderly people are no longer looked by their families, but are put in care homes or nursing homes. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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modern world

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majority

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the majority

of older people bound to

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spend

their lives in

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nursings

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nursing

homes rather than

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look after

by their families.

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above trends have both their negative and positive aspects. There are several advantages of keeping

elderly age group

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the elderly age group

an elderly age group

care

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homes.

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a health perspective

the health perspective

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many times in

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age people are likely to suffer some health issues

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care

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homes are right place to

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look after

them.As

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are trained staff available in

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homes to assist them,

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as, support worker.

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a bit

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benefits of living in

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a nursing home

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for elderly home is to get good company.In

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care

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homes many

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homes, many

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the same group

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intersting

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company to enjoy.In these types of places there are facility of common room

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where elderly people can sit and chat.

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get rid of their boredom

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which is

quit

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there are few disadvantages of

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older people in nursing homes.

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of all

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their

in or at that place

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might be chances that they feel

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abandoned

by their families.

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they believe that they are not longer loved and needed by their families and resulted in heartbroken.

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have bad impact on health because of negative thoughts.

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they

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do not

develop good bonding with their

grandchildrens

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because of

spenting

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spending

less time with them.Not only from their point of few

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it is

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a great drawback for grandchildren as well.Because

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they get less time to meet remain away from their love and affection. In conclusion

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it is true that

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many older people now a days

lookafter

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look after

in nursing homes

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of looking by their children or families.

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trend

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comes

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with some pros and cons.

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Professional care
Medical attention
Trained staff
Social interaction
Combat loneliness
Safety and security
Relief for families
Loss of autonomy
Emotional impact
Cost
Financial strain
Quality of care
Neglect and abuse
Detachment from family
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