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Nowadays most people are not as fit and active, as they were in the past. What are the main causes of this situation? Suggest some possible solutions.

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People in
past
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the past
 like our ancestors or just to be more specific the past two, three generations were probably more
healtheir
having or indicating good health in body or mind; free from infirmity or disease
healthy
 than todays, in respect to both physical and mental
health
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. Their routine
life
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 activity led them to live a proper and
longer
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long
 healthy
life
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. Whereas, now the situation is exactly opposite because the sickness and the
health
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 imbalance that people of past feel in their early 80's are now felt by the people in their 40's and 50's,
moreover
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, the situation will be
more worse
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worse
 an the upcoming
ones
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one
.
Firstly
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, we talk about the reasons that why people in
past
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the past
 were so much healthy in their 80's
also
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. One of the major
reason
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reasons
 behind
this
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 is proper and natural
diet
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 without any junk and mixture. People at that
time
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 used to consume total natural
food
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that is
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 literally impossible to attain now. Perhaps, according to
recent survey
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a recent survey
 by
food
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 and security department in
USA
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the USA
, it is said that only 10% of the population only eat natural and organic
diet
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, while, others are just living on junk
food
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 and catching disease. Apart from the
diet
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 our forefather used to do only physical work that keeps them physically really strong and they do not even want to take out
time
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 for some sort of
excersizes
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
.
However
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, as I mentioned before, people not having a healthy
diet
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 states the main reason for not being properly fit, as healthy lifestyle with proper
food
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 is the key to long
life
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.
Furthermore
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, people nowadays are
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
 much busy in their
worklife
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 always in a rush to make money that causes them a high level of stress and leads to many
health
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 problems like
diabeties
a polygenic disease characterized by abnormally high glucose levels in the blood; any of several metabolic disorders marked by excessive urination and persistent thirst
diabetes
, plus, it
cause
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causes
 your physical fitness as people do not have
time
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 to maintain it and todays routine
life
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 is at its pathetic situation. In a nutshell,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would like to suggest that people in the era of hassle should try to consume organic and natural
food
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. Avoid junk
food
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 as it is directly related to many of the
health
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 problems. Try to stay physically fit by doing cardio
exersizes
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercises
exercise
 and take out
time
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 for themselves to stay stress free

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