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The international community must act immediately to ensure all nations reduce the consumption of fossil fuel ( gas and oil). To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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With the upsurge of world population, the demand for fossil
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 has increased exponentially causing detrimental effects to the environment.
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, I agree with the notion that swift action must be taken by the related authorities to lessen the exploitation of fossil
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. To embark with, the adverse effect of fossil
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 consumption to the environment is undeniable. In recent months, we have been flooded with news reporting about climate change and global warming happening around the world. Emission of greenhouse gas
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 as carbon dioxide and harmful gas from industrial activities and automobiles has polluted the air severely.
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, the recent bush fire in Australia has destroyed half of the
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forest, killing
 a significant number of animals
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 their habitats. As fossil
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 is a non-renewable energy, continuous supply will exhaust the resource. Despite
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much
 research and innovations has been done to utilise renewable energy
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 as wind and solar, the consumption is still not viable in many countries especially in developing countries. Renewable energy sources are costly and it is still in the
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developmental
 level. I believe that our dependence on fossil
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 will reduce with the developments in technology. Meanwhile, strict rules should be imposed in industrial areas on maximum limit of carbon emission. Awareness campaign should be conducted for the public regarding the negative effect of fossil
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 overuse. To recapitulate, it is an alarming truth that the consumption of fossil
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 is going beyond the reasonable limit and effective actions must be applied soon by the decision makers to reduce the damaging effect we might face soon if the demand is not controlled.

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