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The graph below shows tourism statistics among Venezuelian students from 2011 to 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows tourism statistics among Venezuelian students from 2011 to 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates
the
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information about the
number
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 of visiting
students
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 between 2011 to 2014 in Paris, London and Rome. Overview, The highest
number
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 of visiting
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were
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 in London and the least
number
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 of visiting
students
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 was in
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Rome in the
last
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year
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. In the
year
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 2011, there were
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 of 10000 visiting
students
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 in Paris which was the least at that time. After two years the
number
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 of visiting
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 inclined and reached
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20000. In the
year
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 2014,
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number
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 of visiting
students
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 decreased and reached
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nearly 17000. The
number
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 of visiting
students
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 inclined by 50000 from 2011 to 2014.
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students
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 was near about 17000 in 2011,
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 it decreased by almost 10000 in 2012 and in the
year
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 2013, it was again raised to nearly 17000 and in the next
year
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 it was again reduced.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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