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The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph provides data concerning alterations in the
birth
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 and
death
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 quantities in New Zealand over two centuries.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
birth
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rates
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 were the highest in the 20th century and are predicted to fall in the future
whereas
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 the
death
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 amounts seem to exceed those of the
birth
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 in the 21st century. The number of born babies started at around
20000s
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the 20000s
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, surpassing the
death
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rates
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. From
then
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 it has
increase
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increased
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 substantially until 1920, where one year later it has fallen sharply to reach about 25000s. In the meanwhile, the
death
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rates
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 reached a peak of around 15000s for a small period before dropping again at a rate of 11000s. The
death
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rates
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 rose progressively from 1921 until 2005 reaching a quantity of around 30000s and is predicted to continue growing up until 2061
where
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when
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 it is set to level off at under 60000s before going down again
in
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at
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 the end of the period ,
while
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 the
birth
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 amounts hit a high at around 65000s in 1970 and It is predicted to fluctuate and decrease in the future to reach an amount of 42000s.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words birth, death, rates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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