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Bringing in Foreign Workers to fill positions that domestic workers are unwilling to do can cause problems in the local community and should, therefore, be stopped. To what extent do you agree with this?

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Allowing International
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 to work in the place of native employers brings many issues. I agree with the statement because replacing a group of workers brings the economic slowdown and people lose interest in doing their jobs due to these unnecessary conflicts. In general, a country's per capita income comes from the Industry people. When these income holders are replaced with people from other countries (where country workers count less than 50%), a huge Inflation occurs. Let's assume employers in one sector of the company pays a 0.5% tax of the whole country in a year when these people are substituted with overseas candidates, a countries money value is decreased.
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 thought creates insecurity in the people who are working in other parts of the organization (maybe in other companies too).
Job Seekers percentage
Suggestion
The Job Seekers percentage
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 will be reduced in that particular sector, as there is no scope for them. Employees will face Irrationationilty. Safety and benefits will be reduced. Automatically, Foreign employees get all the rewards. There is a necessity for
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 kind of treatment to be stopped. It will not only abandon the people from one Industry (or) one sector, It will result in a new revolution where other organizations will be interested in recruiting candidates other than local to be in an advanced position. In conclusion, A company/organization is built in a locale to give employment to the unemployed persons in that area. If that company breaks its purpose of entry, there is no need for the people to encourage/
enroll
register formally as a participant or member
enrol
enrolled
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 an area.

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