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Besides a lot of advantage, some people believe that internet created many problems. To what extent you agree or disagree with this statement?

#advantage #people #internet
It is irrefutable that
i
nternet
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the internet
p
lay
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plays
a significant role in our l
ife
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lives
and becoming popular among people at v
ast rate
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a vast rate
vast rates
.
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Some people assert that
i
nternet
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the internet
has l
ot
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lots
of
benefit
,
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,
whereas other assumes it has c
reate
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created
more problem. In my opinion
,
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,
there are certain
benefit
 of
i
nternet
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the internet
yet it is hard to overlook its drawback. In
this
 essay
,
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i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
would shed light on both in details before conclusion can be drawn. There are several
b
enefit
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benefits
of
internet
.
Firstly
, the
internet
 help in many w
ay
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ways
to access someone easily. For an example, in official work with the help of
internet
 sending email to others within a few moments while sending a paper letter takes at least couple of days.
Moreover
, it is fact that
i
nternet
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the internet
gives many information and educational knowledge all the w
orld.
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worlds
 For an instance, s
tudent
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students
a student
can access different educational sites to get information and learn new things
.
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On the contrary
 side, now a days
,
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,
there are many different types of scam involves in
internet
.
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In other words
,
such
 as cyber crime
,
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,
access someone personal details and hacking details. There is no doubt
,
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,
according to the s
urvey 50
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survey, 50
percent of online banking scam is increasing for
last
 few years by advertising fake ads on
i
nternet
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the internet
.
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Other reasons is i
mpact
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impacting
on y
oungster
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the youngster
b
y
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of
showing violent content online. To put in a nutshell, i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
pen down and say that if there are
b
enefit
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benefits
of
i
nternet
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the internet
as well there is
also
 d
rawback
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a drawback
the drawback
of
internet
. It d
epend
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depends
on us how we can minimize side effect and aware other folks from scam
.
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